Improve Your Dating Profile With Storytelling

Tell a Story to Improve Your Dating Profile


In our last couple of posts we have given the example of two people, a man and woman (named Paul and Daisy respectively), who struggle with online dating. In our last post we showed how the strategies they both used are boring and don’t spark up attraction. Unfortunately, the same strategy is being used by nearly everyone online. If you’ve ever wondered how to improve your dating profile you have come to the right place.

Instead of using a laundry lists of adjectives to describe yourself, why not do something a little more interesting? You can do this by telling a story. In fact, you may have already noticed that the posts on this website are all based around the story of Paul and Daisy (which will continue below). Storytelling keeps people engaged. This is something you want to use to improve your dating profile.

Lets pick back up where we left our story last time. Daisy and Paul had incredibly boring profiles. In case you forgot, Daisy’s profile began like this:

  • Well, I really HATE talking about myself but I’ll try. I’m fun, quirky, compassionate and down to earth. I have two dogs and I love to take them on walks. I work as a women’s hairstylist. After my last boyfriend I have learned what I don’t want from relationships. This means that if you are a mommas boy, or only interested in sex don’t bother messaging me. I want a man who is kind, genuine and has a job… etc.

Here is an example of the same information told in a story format:

  • After a long day at work helping women look their best I like to strap on my walking shoes, grab my dogs Shasta and Fido and hit the trail. There is no better way to spend free time than volunteering at the soup kitchen before playing on my co-ed Frisbee team. I’m here because I wouldn’t mind finding a gentleman who likes Yorkies and can spin a Frisbee with the best of them…

Can you tell the difference? I sure hope so.

The background information stays pretty much the same but it is far more engaging. It reads as if it were written by someone with, dare I say, a personality. If you have ever heard someone say “show me don’t tell me”, this is what they mean. Show them the adjectives rather than list them. Show compassion by telling them you volunteer at the soup kitchen. Show them you are fun because you play sports. This is perhaps the single best way to improve your dating profile besides having a quality picture.

Lets look at Paul’s profile before:

  • Hi, I like to work on my car, walk my dogs and go to the gym when I’m not at work. I work at a bank and I process loan information and sometimes get to assist the regional manager on certain projects. My friends think that I am funny, smart and loyal. I am looking for a woman who is kind, loving, likes sports…. yada, yada, yada.

Now, we take the same information and SHOW it to improve your dating profile:

  • When I’m not helping people get the house of their dreams during the workweek, I’m often found getting my hands covered in oil while working underneath my ’68 Ford project car. During the fall there is no better past-time than BBQ and football with friends and telling jokes that make grown men cry from laughter. I like women who aren’t afraid to get ketchup on their dress at a summer baseball game or like to bring out the trusty putter for a fun game of putt-putt golf…

That’s how you “show” what you are all about. This is how you tell a story. This works. It isn’t deception. It isn’t magic. It is just you – with an improved way of communicating what is desirable about you.

To read the next chapter in Paul and Daisy’s quest for love (and more info to improve your dating profile), click here.


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